Making our stories interesting

WALHT Make our stories interesting. I learnt how to add sounds words in my stories. I found it interesting because I never used questions,feelings and sound words. Next time i would post more stuff on my next post and here's a story to that i did in the holiday in 2018.

Looking out the car window i could finally see a sign for Dargaville. So I went back to sleep. Next time i woke up I saw Auntie's house. I was excited. My Auntie  gave us a hug  and we all  went inside. Waiting for us was baby Elijah. we all gave him a hug and asked my Auntie.
"Auntie can we have a meat patty?" we ask.
"Okay" said Auntie she gave us all a meat patty"
"thanks Auntie" i said
"your welcome"
"girls jade time to go"
"Oh mum"we moaned as we packed up. as we went home.